07-06-2002 02:15									#31
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PM me nominations for the SUNES with the following categories, due to the limited voting, you cannot nominate yourself, but you can vote for yourself.

Funniest NESser:
Most Expansionistic NESser
Most Commercial NESser
Most Gipped NESser
Most Diplomatic
Most Empire Growth
Most historically accurate
Most off the wall.

These are all based on the SUNES, Please PM me all nominations Before Thursday, June 13th.

If you wish to add a category, PM me and I'll update it if you have a good reason.

	09-06-2002 03:06									#32
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I would like to apply for membership to the storywriters union I wrote Power Gained & Power Lost also known as Book 1 of the Dagger of Justice Series.

	09-06-2002 03:28									#33
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When does the voting start?

	09-06-2002 07:22									#34
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when I get at least 2 noms for each category

	09-06-2002 07:22									#35
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OOOH almost forgot, welcome our newest member High Lord J!!

	09-06-2002 08:22									#36
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I thought this union was for helping each other write better stories by constructive criticism and feedback?

sign me up if so. tell me about my stuff in SNESA 2.

	09-06-2002 12:40									#37
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NESes don't count i'm afraid, the main qualification is an independent story, if you wrote a regular story once, send me the link and you're in, otherwise write a story, i'll look for it.

	09-06-2002 12:49									#38
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If you write that story as well as you did in the NES tho you'll have no problem

	09-06-2002 17:05									#39
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http://apolyton.net/forums/showthre...&threadid=52437

critique it please

	09-06-2002 21:36									#40
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Skilord,

You might want to write the story on word or anything like it and then spell check it. You have a lot of misspelled and not capitalized words. I use AOL Notepad thing for all my posts then spell check them.

Don't break up the paragraphs with broken lines. It looks very unprofessional. If you can't make it obvious when you switch characters through the writing just put a * next to the paragraph for a new character.

Other then that it is really standard beginning. You might want to make something more interesting to start out the story. I recognize you tried to make it not look like you were just stating facts in the start you kind of were. Although you should do that in the story the way you did with people thinking so readers get an idea of what is going on it shouldn't be the first paragraph of the story.

I hope none of this is insulting I am just trying to help out. Let me know if this is to negative, or arrogant. Good luck on your next piece and let me know if want anymore help on your story. I haven't seen many ancient age Japanese stories on the board and this one may be interesting.

	09-06-2002 21:39									#41
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High lord, just a small note, it's better for the author if you post critiques on the story because it bumps up the thread, just keep that in mind for next time, it's no big.

	09-06-2002 21:42									#42
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Will do thanks for the suggestion

	09-06-2002 21:47									#43
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no prob bob

	09-06-2002 22:10									#44
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thanx anyway.

	10-06-2002 13:52									#45
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http://64.246.32.51/~admin1/forums/...&threadid=52518

I just started on this story, can you please critique it. Thanks in advance.

	13-06-2002 05:49									#46
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I's like to apply for membership for having written 'Our Secret War'.

	13-06-2002 08:49									#47
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Welcome another great writer, GeneralTacticus, to the Union!!

	14-06-2002 01:15									#48
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hey can i join, i know i only wrote small, crap worth story, but im working on another.

	14-06-2002 01:37									#49
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Cool, 16 members, let's welcome trickey!!!

	14-06-2002 08:26									#50
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For those that are interested, the newest installment to The Cost of War is in.

This installment has a little less action but actually ties in some of the references in the earlier parts and has some of the characters finally intersecting.

The Cost of War

	15-06-2002 06:03									#51
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hey would you guys mind reviewing my new story please. Its called 2nd attmep at a sory.

	24-06-2002 19:57									#52
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Hey! I need a new Reveiw of Cult Of the Rising Sun, Chapter 2. Less spelling mistakes this time.

Is the Union out of the NES buisiness?

	25-06-2002 00:35									#53
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I'll be Moderating the next SUNES, unfortunately for all NES fans, I cannot do that while in Philly, I get back to WI on the 30th, so you can expect the NES about the same time as July starts.

	25-06-2002 21:45									#54
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Hello guys...

Not to sound ignorant, but I am unclear as to the purpose of this, and what being a member means. Would you gentlemen be so kind to enlighten me?

Thanks.

	26-06-2002 00:48									#55
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Basically, membership means that you have written a story on apolyton, and asked to become a member. Members basically stand up for each other when being harassed by non-members, and we critique or at least read each other's stories in the hopes that our own writing will improve. Grundel, you do have an open slot if you wish to join.

	26-06-2002 23:14									#56
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thanks for the response.

I have read several posts in this thread in which people have asked to have their stories critiqued. However I see few critques. Are these attatched to the stories that were posted here, or do you do them using private messaging or email?

Thanks again for humoring me. :-D

	27-06-2002 03:29									#57
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The critiques are posted in the story thread.

	28-06-2002 03:44									#58
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quote: The critiques are posted in the story thread.

...Efficient system

Iits seems to work well

Good idea metaliturtle

	28-06-2002 03:50									#59
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thanks Dark

	02-07-2002 07:38									#60
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*- Well not really but it sounds likje a kewl story.

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