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DanQ
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Emperor of Apolyton, Ruler of the Here and Now
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Ontario, Canada
Aug 1998 time: 00:20
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quote: Originally posted by JohnIII
Mark, thanks for the fixes! I like the factt hat the intro link is slightly different to the rest.
Dan, that isn't a suggestion at all, that's an excuse. Being wordy and pretentious is not a matter of style, it's a matter of not knowing how to write.
The welcome paragraph sounds like a badly-written politician's speech, and doesn't really tell you anything, apart from:
1) Civilization.
2) Founded on 26th July 1998.
3) Civ.
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Now we're getting personal, John, where there is no need. Whether you find the summary pretentious, which is intended to promote the site (we are allowed to "toot our own horn" now and again, aren't we? {grin}), or not is not a matter of question as to who and who cannot write. This description has served the site well and is no need of further modification. The introductory page link from this point allows visitors to 'bypass' the character if they choose to do so. We don't force you to read it. 
As for the issue in terms of the layout of the paragraph on the homepage and the text on the "Introduction" page, as you already said there is no real constructive way around it.
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JohnIII
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Personal? If you poured your heart and soul into that paragraph, then yes, otherwise that's just a way of avoiding the issue.
Like GP said, read Strunk & White's Elements of Style. You seem to be unclear about what pretentious is: you are certainly allowed to toot your own horn, but that's not what pretentious means.
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DanQ
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Emperor of Apolyton, Ruler of the Here and Now
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Ontario, Canada
Aug 1998 time: 00:20
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quote: Originally posted by JohnIII
Personal? If you poured your heart and soul into that paragraph, then yes, otherwise that's just a way of avoiding the issue.
Like GP said, read Strunk & White's Elements of Style. You seem to be unclear about what pretentious is: you are certainly allowed to toot your own horn, but that's not what pretentious means. |
"Personal" may have been a strong word but I believe you are making a big deal out of nothing. I do know what the word "pretentious" means: showy, pompus, conceited... just to name a few synonyms. What I said in my previous post was along the lines of understanding that definition and responding to it.
In summary, you don't like the paragraph in question, I think it's fine the way it is. Let's agree to disagree and be done with this. Peace? 
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panag
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MY WORDS ARE BACKED WITH BIO-CHEMICAL WEAPONS
Oct 2000 time: 07:20
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quote: Originally posted by DanQ

Blue and red are Apolyton's "traditional" colours and are met to compliment each other yet at the same time stand apart.
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hi ,
red - white - blue , nice , also the colours of the US flag , any meaning to this , ....
for what its worth , the site is nice , and ones again the best site concerning civ in general , and the way its going very soon to become a "true virtue" , a quote from a couple of people who dont like any other gaming releted site , .....
at least this site gets updated
have a nice day 
Last edited by panag on 21-06-2002 at 02:36
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