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vovan
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Originally posted by bassman:
Perhaps the lovely blonde woman is Catherine's daughter
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Ooh, ooh, it's my turn to make a wacko prediction of the day (© unscratchedfoot):
The woman in the church is not Catherine's daughter. Here is the deal: When Leeds was conquered back when, Catherine came to the crushed city, to make a speech. She wanted to convince the Englishmen that they should not resist, and if they willingly join Russian workers in their efforts to create bright future, they would live happy lives. When she was leaving the city, she saw a little girl, standing on her knees in front of a dead woman's body, crying. As a sign of goodwill, and to further impress the people, Czarina decided to take the girl with her, and let her be one of her maids. A lackey sat the girl into the carriage, next to the ruler of Russia.
"What do they call you?" asked Catherine in English.
"Jess," answered the girl...
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Jess lived with Czarina in the palace, and the two of them got so attached to each other, that Czarina felt motherly love towards the girl, and in the mind of Jess replaced her deceased mother. Catherine all but officially adopted Jess. Of course, the girl never knew that Russians actually killed her parents. She also fell in love with a page named Mikhail. He also reminded her of Mike with his looks. Besides, he was a very witty young man, and spoke English fluently.
With time, Jess got to know Russian very well, but never lost her ability to speak English.
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On the fatal day for Catherine, Jess was in the cathedral, praying for the well-being of her step-mother, hoping that maybe some day she could become the ruler of the Mighty Empire of Russia, since the Czarina had no other heirs.
Jess heard footsteps, and hid behind the altar. She sat there during the whole thing, occasionally peeking out. But when she caught glimpses of the English faces, in desperate need of a shave, and disfigured with anger, terror, and some barbarian desire to kill, she was so scared that she didn't dare even breathe, and held her breath for minutes at a time.
She also saw general Vovan go down in a barrage of bullets... She remembered when she was a little girl, he used to come to the palace, and bring her toys and sweets. (The part she didn't know was that he just tried to gain access to the throne, knowing of Catherine’s tender feelings towards the girl.) Even though Jess had always remembered that she was born in England, she had just seen two of the dearest people in her life die. Again. This was too much for her. As the assassins fled, she knew that she would devote her life to seeking them out and destroying them.
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Her search is close to being over. She is sitting in a church. Her revenge would be so much sweeter, since the man she hates most would die in the same surrounding she saw the man she loved like a father breathe his last…
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Ha, beat that scratchy 
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vovan
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Look, now, Chrisius, I don't know about Scratchy, but I can tell you this: I don't need to buy no msitakes* from you, I can make some of my own - juicy homebred ones. Maybe you make yours from concentrate, or keep them in the fridge for months. How do I know? Now, if I use my own, I always know they are fresh and succulent - the readers will like 'em
Therefore, you need to compile a list of which mistakes you got for sale, so that the authors could either credit you, or come up with their own! 
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* msitake - © ChrisiusMaximus.
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vovan
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* Vovan hears the crowd outside his window chant: "Sequel! Sequel!! Sequel!!!" *
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Kaos XIII
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beautiful coastal city of... Que te Importa
May 2003
time: 00:23
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Your first story, hmm. I just started reading it and I’m up to where the Russians captured Leeds, GRRRR.
It’s funny reading everyone’s year old post.
I’m glad Fight for Freedom is rolling along. I’ll catch up with that one later.
Last edited by Kaos XIII on 07-10-2003 at 09:51
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vovan
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Well, I reread the whole thread from the beginning, inspired by Kaos' statement that "It’s funny reading everyone’s year old post" and indeed it's pretty interesting to read stuff I already forgot I wrote or read. :) Man, I was pretty harsh with the first couple of posts, eh? :D Any ways, now that I've reread everything, I'd like to reiterate something I said in my very first post in this thread:
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There are three kinds of stories I found here. I separate them based on what I am thinking after I have read them:
1. Nah, this is too boring to read.
2. Wow, this is really good!
3. Hey, this is cool, why don't I write something also.
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(Sorry about quoting myself. I am normally not like that :)) This thing still inspires me to write something. In fact, I am so inspired now that if it wasn't 2 o'clock in the morning, and if I didn't have an economics test at 8 and a physics test at 9 o'clock tomorrow morning (well, I guess I should say: today), I'd sit down and write something right now. :)
Oh, and one more thing, this amount of feedback makes me too jealous. Maybe I should bump postmortem. ;)
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12-11-2002 11:37
That'd be great 
I would kill each and everyone of you on the spot to be able to read a sequel from the master.
or have I missed something here... 
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