27-06-2004 23:07									#1
	Data Angels Faction Description Inflate your Upload Space

Since our promo isn't in, I've made an unofficial version.
here

If anyone objects, I'll pull it down.
At the moment, it's missing:
1. A charter / constitution
2. Short Descriptions of our players.


I intend to portray this faction as one for all types of mindsets.
I'd rather not be reduced to a closed-mind bureaucracy like I've yelled about previously.

	28-06-2004 10:10									#2
	Support Apolyton, buy Civilization 2

Mmm, the player description can be omitted IMO. Basically we're a team, no need to show us as individuals to the casual bypasser who might be interested in joining. New applicants can always learn who the team members are when they're in...

For the rest, the overall tone is rather assertive. I Can imagine that many wouldbe members decide to choose another faction when reading it.

Edit: I'll look a bit closer to your work when I catched some 's

Last edited by GeoModder on 28-06-2004 at 10:25

	28-06-2004 11:50									#3
	Increase the size of your Attachments

Obviously the individuals are the ones you interact with.
But of course, if you won't submit a description then the description list is moot.

Its lack of passive voice is because I wrote it like a scientific report - this is SMAX, this is the ACDG, these are the Angels.
I read it aloud to myself and edited it until it sounded right -
that I knew what I was on about, and presented the Angels as a competent faction.

The main problem with attracting newbies is that our intro is long, but that's my way of being selective.
Being the faction with the longest, most informative intro is my way of attracting those who want to sump the information here,
and repulsing those without the attention span to even read our topped threads.
point taken, we have no topped threads, but still...

Note the propaganda bits -
I suggest that The Data Angels know people, and that
the Data Angels can make people both happy and effective.
Such is the natural drive of all humans.
In reality, I'm only speaking for myself. That's why I added the disclaimer - I wanted to give you the option of ignoring or neglecting your teammates if you so wished.