24-07-2005 00:53									#1
	Russian Rulette Put an end to popups!

Sucked and since couldnt delete thread Ill delete post.

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	30-07-2005 22:22									#2
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Just posting to say that I'm reading.
I have no opinion on this yet, just a few comments/questions:

quote: Rulette

... Did you mean "Roulette" or was the mispelling intentional... IE: were you planning on making a pun?

And this seems more like a Prologue setting the stage rather than the action actually happening. It reads like a history rather than a story right now.

quote: In the meantime, Czar Trollnika IV will make sweeping changes in the labor reform. Soon the world will know why we are producing a machine to lift Mother Russia upon high.

"producing a machine"... I'm not quite certain what this means... sorry.

	31-07-2005 02:06									#3
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You are correct

confusion of mish mash of unrelated words too complicated to fathom

scrapped

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	01-08-2005 23:02									#4
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Okay- thank you for the explanation!

I still think that perhaps more should be explained about the term 'producing a machine' in the story itself- but at least I understand what you meant now!

	02-08-2005 02:43									#5
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	14-08-2005 09:01									#7
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quote: Originally posted by Paddy the Scot