01-12-2003 09:41									#31
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quote: Originally posted by jimmytrick The capital H leads one to believe that the Horizon is a ship. The string "another fun filled picnic outing" is so bad it makes the teeth grind. The last two words could be dropped. I can't go more than 3/10 for this one.

Well, I can't argue any of that. It was a first ever attempt though. I'll take the 3 and be happy.

	01-12-2003 10:37									#32
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"Tsk, tsk. Traditionally, a good story should contain equal amounts of religion, aristocracy, mystery and romance."

EEEEEEEH?

You're weird.

	01-12-2003 10:40									#33
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It's a joke...

	01-12-2003 11:06									#34
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quote: Originally posted by Immortal Wombat Sure it wasn't the best plan, it involved too many levers, tripwires and guns made of rusty nails, but under the circumstances it was the best I could do.

I think this wuold be better the way I read it first

with 'lawyers' instead of 'levers'

as far as mine goes

" As Micahal strode purposely towards the throne, he saw (to the left, behind the throne) Shayna (the only sentient being (other than himself) that he had left alive in the universe) undergoing the transformation (which they had used on every other being) into a blackhole."

Jon Miller

	01-12-2003 11:55									#35
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As the escalator descended he eyed Mikey Two-Step, and remembered his instructions; strike quickly and cleanly so that neither the victim nor his aorta would react until he was safely away.

	01-12-2003 19:50									#36
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When John decided that he would kill himself, he never thought it would be so easy.

	01-12-2003 20:03									#37
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When the first thing you see waking up at a morning is a 300-pound man wearing an ill-fitting ballerina suit and telling you "It is not going to be a good day", you better believe him.

	01-12-2003 20:05									#38
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quote: Originally posted by Winston Tsk, tsk. Traditionally, a good story should contain equal amounts of religion, aristocracy, mystery and romance. So basically, an opening sentence along the lines of "God Almighty", cried the countess, "how on Earth did I get pregnant?" would be ideal.

Where are religion, romance, and mystery?

	01-12-2003 20:08									#39
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Fear.

(edit: yeah, I know this is plagiarized from Leonard Koppett...)

	01-12-2003 21:09									#40
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*There were many reasons which could have explained why that assignment was an utter failure ; I could have been pleading simple or tortuous excuses, generally accepted pretexts, imaginative fallacies, coloured or flat lies, but for once I was under the unusual impression that there was no safer way than telling the truth.*

I know : lack of aristocracy, religion, romance, but I can get 1 anyway

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	01-12-2003 23:45									#41
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As i clicked the link i remembered how they had all told me id' be back, that no one ever left this place for good.

	02-12-2003 00:03									#42
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quote: Originally posted by Urban Ranger Where are religion, romance, and mystery?

Are you purposefully trying to be humorless, or did you just not get it?

	02-12-2003 01:27									#43
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How about this one, Mono:

"Get contacts, get a haircut, get better clothes, and lose some weight."

	02-12-2003 03:35									#44
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"Get contacts, get a haircut, get better clothes, and lose some weight."

On the one hand, it rings realistic, but on the other hand it seems a bit derivative of trainspotting. Still, it has punch. 6/10

	02-12-2003 03:40									#45
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It needs a good follow-up line.

"Get laid, get that bum-fluff off your face and get out of mine."

	02-12-2003 03:53									#46
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Too british. I mean, come on, fluff??? Jeez, it'll never sell in middle america.

	02-12-2003 03:55									#47
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"Don't Touch that!"

	02-12-2003 04:30									#48
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Sadly, he never saw it coming.

	02-12-2003 04:42									#49
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"You are a gay tvvat." stated the moderator, completely devoid of irony.

	02-12-2003 05:54									#50
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Stefu noted the sheep where a bit more coy then usual.

	02-12-2003 08:35									#51
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quote: Originally posted by Kaak Sadly, he never saw it coming.

I was skimnming the entries and noting the frequent use of commas. Hard to get a complex thought into one sentence without writing a complex sentence. Here Kaak settles for one slightly modified thought expressed in only six words and yet he insists on putting a comma in there.

	02-12-2003 08:38									#52
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quote: Originally posted by Boris Godunov Are you purposefully trying to be humorless, or did you just not get it?

Is this an entry? Cause it's the best line yet.

8/10

	02-12-2003 08:40									#53
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quote: Originally posted by Uncle Sparky "You are a gay tvvat." stated the moderator, completely devoid of irony.

Other than the puncuation errors, are you saying that the tvvat is devoid of irony or the moderator.

2/10

	02-12-2003 08:45									#54
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quote: Originally posted by Uncle Sparky Stefu noted the sheep where a bit more coy then usual.

Two misspelled words of eleven, yet no word over 5 letters. No poet sheppard thee. 3/10

	02-12-2003 08:47									#55
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You should at least spell "punctuation" correctly when criticizing people over it.




(That can be an entry, too.)

	02-12-2003 08:54									#56
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quote: Originally posted by Boris Godunov You should at least spell "punctuation" correctly when criticizing people over it.

7/10. You got me intrigued

	02-12-2003 08:54									#57
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quote: Originally posted by Boris Godunov Are you purposefully trying to be humorless, or did you just not get it?

Bah, you oaf, mine was an entry.

	02-12-2003 08:56									#58
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Suuuure it was--but note mine got an 8/10.

	02-12-2003 09:00									#59
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quote: Originally posted by Boris Godunov Suuuure it was--but note mine got an 8/10.

Unfair, I say, unfair!

	02-12-2003 09:02									#60
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Jimmytrick brushed the egg off his face, shot him a look, and slinked out through the kitchen.

"That's Godunov to beat me", he mumbled as he went.